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Friday, June 30, 2017

please and thank you minecraft

Hey Friends

Outer Space Journey

It was peaceful in the overworld but some people got bored so they went to the local mine and days later they built a rocket and they finished. several afternoons later on the most boring sunday of all 5 friends go on a journey to outer space an enderman 2 humans 2 dragons.

But  the spaceship had stuff on the front window and there was no TOILET on the spaceship so they went back to earth and they got the  TOILET from the shop and the spaceship when it was blasting of it just made it to 79 feet in the air explode and they ended up in the end (a dimension in minecraft).


“Hey we are in the end” said the enderman.  
“Hey ender dragon can we please get outta here?”
The ender dragon thought in his mind… I am only teleporting them because they used their manners. I am sort of nice… sometimes…
“Yes!” said the ender dragon.

(teleporting sounds) “thank you”they said as they faded purple and disappeared in a flash!

We made it back! The ender dragon isn’t a bad mob. Lucky he was in a good mood!

Moral of the story always remember to say please and thank you!

Made by Regan, typed by Regan and Miss Morgan

PS animation coming soon!

8 comments:

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  2. Argh no toilet - that could have been a disaster. I am glad they went back and got one. Great to see you're using speech marks in your writing Regan. I am looking forward to the animation.

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  3. This is great Regan, look at how much you have written! I love how you are using exclamation marks! speech marks and also comma's. Keep up the good work!

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  4. Hi Regan, I am really pleased to see your writing on here. I really like that you set the scene by telling your readers why your characters built a rocket. Good thinking to build it in a mine where no one would be able to see. Please send a copy to me of your animation when it is done. Great work. Well done.

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  5. I will also be looking forward to the animation!!!

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  6. Great story,what a great adventure.

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  7. Regan, I am so pleased you have shared your story with us. I miss your wonderful stories you have a great imagination. I am so pleased they went back to get the toilet otherwise it could have got very messy. I was wondering what does an enderman look like?

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  8. Wow what a great story. I like how you said they "disappeared in a flash!" it made me realise how fast they moved. I also think it was great that you added in those extra details like that the End is a dimension in Minecraft and that there were teleporting noises. Awesome punctuation too. I agree manners are always best! I'd love to read more stories about Minecraft because I don't know much about it :-) Looking forward to the animation!

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